SGA HELP!

Quick, I need someone to beta my kid!fic for me. I should really have one on retainer, but I hardly ever have my stuff beta'd (tho I probably should). Anywho, I need a spotter for tense, voice, and I know I say this about all my fics, but I'm honestly not sure if this fic makes any sense. So any and all help is needed.

Interested? Please?